Hey folks: I've added four new ones after a summer spent relatively computer-free. Please give me some feedback. Question, concerns, social notes...
Cheers on that one Halfpint. I love the transition from nostalgic paean to angry rant. It's a great juxtaposition. Nice piece.
That first piece is raw, Princess. Bleeding from the eyes raw.
Thanks Red...that really means a lot. On the recording front, I didn't realize I could post sound clips. How would I go about doing that?
I'm going to take KittenX's advice and follow the lead of Redyelruc and Skyfire and start adding onto a single thread. Please feel free to...
You don't need any help, Skyfire. This is a nice piece. Only a couple trouble spots for me personally. First what I liked though. The best thing I...
Okay Red, I've read through everything here, and I've got to say, I like the way you write. Your pieces are succinct, at times hard-hitting, often...
Yeah, that second one is great little bit of wordplay. Cheers
Great idea man. Each stanza is longer than the last; the jumble and confusion of Night Three nicely captures the nature of insomnia (this I know...
nice one...last four lines, just pure poetry. especially the "And I love to be named/By these things that I do" line...amazing bit of wordplay...
Hats off, man. Not many people can make rhyming couplets sing, but you've managed to do it. Some great imagery there too. Plus, it's hard to...
Thanks man. Point taken. I can see what you're saying. I really want to keep the idea of never being able to catch the end of the road, as well as...
The man with the razor sharp penis drove until the road blurred and headlights exploded from the night, raced the streetlights to the edge of...
The monkey thing is actually kind of an interesting interpretation, I think. It's quite easy to imagine a monkey (though monkeys don't notice...
Hey there: you've got some nice words there man. I like the way you've taken the 'My friends all say i'm shallow' line and threw it out in the...
Wow guys. thanks very much. i'm glad you liked it.
Thanks very much for your thoughts guys. It's nice to get some feedback. As for any meaning behind my scribble Teh-Horace, I don't get too caught...
some nice images in the there, teh-horace. 'tongue in hand' i particularly like, 'web of splotchy starlight' is also quite nice. you have a unique...
I want to write something but I don't know where to begin anymore, words used to flow from my brain like a pre-teen's first bleed, with the ease...
In our talk there was a kind of sex that lingered in the open doorways of the tiny empires we built on heavy afternoons, swatting clouds of...
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