Short-Suited Romance

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by TenCentArcade, Mar 19, 2005.

  1. TenCentArcade

    TenCentArcade Banned

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    We’re all dealt the bad hand
    When we’re lingering in love
    So I linger a bit longer
    On the smell of your perfume
    We’re all hypocritical
    When we use the word hypocrisy
    So I suppose it’s possible
    I’ve misjudged the novelty
    Of irony

    I left my mark under her chin
    Where the cotton meets the skin
    I left my last stamp of misguidance
    Confusion, pride, and romance
    Where the cotton meets the skin

    We’ve all been sent careening
    Down the blistered sun-scarred edge
    Of a certain empty gesture
    That is the memory of fleeting
    We’ve all been found to be lost
    Without a crying shame and
    Without a pocket to cry into
    Just singing the same damn song
    Of irony

    I left my mark under her chin
    Where the cotton meets the skin
    I left my stamp of indifference
    Slander, stupidity, and romance
    Where the cotton meets the skin

    And in a state of foreseeable disaster
    I can stammer my way to victory
    Stumble timidly like the man
    I’ve never been and never will be
    Curse my words under my breath
    Like the man I never was

    We’ll all be merely dancing
    When you’ll ask me “How is this fun?”
    And that’s when you’ll hear
    What I’m screaming at the sun
    We’ll laugh at what we did
    And mourn what was never done
    As we’ve graduated to children
    Trying to grasp the idea of love
    And irony

    I left my mark under her chin
    Where the cotton meets the skin
    I left my stamp of impotence
    Stability, fear, and romance
    Where the cotton meets the skin
    I left my stamp of silence
    Anxiety, anger, and romance
    Where the cotton meets the skin




    It is probably evident that, since I last wrote a song, I have been listening to a lot of Elvis Costello and Paul Simon. The influence, I imagine, is obvious.
     
  2. kidder

    kidder Member

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    It has its moments. It's more Costello than Simon. And you know why.
     
  3. TenCentArcade

    TenCentArcade Banned

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    Well, yeah, because Costello is better than Simon.
     
  4. OneUndone

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    The poem has a real flow to it. Works very nicely. I like the chorus especially.
     
  5. Bloody_Kisses

    Bloody_Kisses Thizzler

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    as always, i love it. your writing portrays the very essence of humanity. much like costello. your good at this romantic shit, eliot, so WRITE MORE. youre gonna be famous one day, i swear it.
     
  6. VanAstral

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    I haven't a clue.
    essence of humanity?
    Maybe.
    Very good?
    For sure!
     
  7. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    ~* Enjoyed alot. It does indeed have its moments, thanks.
     
  8. BrownTripleQQ

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    Great Poetry!!!!
     
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