Black rain Black rain fell tonight, as we sat around a fireside bright. Observing the Unobservant. Intrigued by the human mind. and Black rain fell, As the fire shone Bright...
I liked this,but I feel it's missing a common theme to tie the reader in completely. Good foundation IMO <3
huh? ha! ha!sorry ramble,but i dont understand what your talkin' about.please translate simply.what does missin' a common theme mean?an what does IMO< mean?
Well, I guess I mean that you needed to more clearly state what you are talking about. This piece had the descriptiveness to it but nothing holding it down IE a real time situation or what have you. This is just my opinion (=IMO in my opinion).
thanks ramble.gotya now!you were just explaining what you thought of my poem.but a poem ta me is just a poem.it just is what it is.when i'm writing it just comes the way it comes.i don't think about them.i just enjoy writing them.and every poem describes itself.but like any art,be it poetry,painting or whatever,the beauty is people can take out of it what they want too and my poem did come from a real life situation.we were just all chillin' hangin 'round the fireside at the time i wrote it.all my poems songs an stories come from faction.somethin' someone says,sometimes somethin i just say myself and simple from mere observations of reality.it was just a fleeting thought that i put to paper.fleeting thoughts dont have anchors.if they had they woul'nt be able to fleet.i just write cos i lov writing.i write for myself first an foremost,if someone else enjoys them good an well,if not thats ok too.thanks for explaining ramble and explaining i.m.o. thats a very handy shortcut i can use for future reference.do you have poems in here somewhere.if so where are they? as i would like to read them.
Cool ^ I agree with you Yeah I have a few collection threads. One is Words Verse, and the other is Words Play They are both on the front page of the poetry section (I recently bumped them) Tell what you think of them, for good or bad. Enjoy.
ok ramble.thanks,i'll check em out!i'm just startin ta get that everythings a seperate thread.what do you mean when you say that you have "recently bumped them"you can let me know again.i'm off ta read your poems now.
I mean that I recently posted in them to bring them to the front page, so that people cand find and read them easily.
This had a strong feel of a post by writer "Norastar" Dated Dec,9 2002. It reads: "I believed it when I saw their faces of amusement, and the words that said I was crazy. So that's the way I decided to play untill I looked in the mirror and hated what I saw. Running to the edge, humility brought me back, and spite fed me supper". I saved it back then because I liked the way it rolls off the tongue. Hope you like. I like your poem as well Roamy. Ginsum ~
Yes I have seen such - though there is always hope Like all good fires a Phoenix can rise up from its warmth, Maybe in time there will be a quality of realisation and spring forward for a change, For there is always hope
what did ya see billy? an what kind of realisation an change do you hope for? i like that image, a phoenix rising.that would be a good poem title. The rising phoenix.:sunny:
Yes it was. I will share a few I wrote as well. We had a lot of fun here some years ago. Do you know if "Stellablue" is still a moderator here?
cool! look forward ta reading your poems. no gin i don't know about stellablue.i'm only here a few months.post your poems when ya get time.:2thumbsup:
hi! im norastar, also hnugginbuggin, also hnugginz. i am now Sally Salamander on facebook, and rainbowskunxx on instagram,
