newest creative burst (untitled)

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by skyfire, Jun 7, 2004.

  1. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    it was the season of fire
    we sat quiet in the burnt wind
    the singed moon was dark as a raven's eye
    it was a traitor's moon
    you held a secret like a poker hand
    your lies undetectable as a land mine
    we bought magic mushrooms
    and hallucinated paradise
    the blue evening turned velvet
    indigo lingered like unspoken hope
    a handful of stars dusted the sky
    but none of the constellations were right
    incense perfumed the air
    your voice made me drunk
    sun-warmed and hypnotic
    like a hand between my legs
    i was helplessly intoxicated
    your murmured words of love were my lullabies
    i was half a planet away
    floating in a turquoise sea
    dancing by moonlight to lurid guitars
    in a far-away kingdom of shadows scented like fire
    i hungered for you
    i wanted you to hold me
    and make me real
    but there was a calm that wasnt quite sane
    cool and sad, you were trained on some distant horizon
    i closed my ice-blue eyes
    and watched the tiny jeweled dancers
    they took me away
    and spoke to me in languages that had no words
    as they gyrated to the music of lover's voices in the dark
    my dreams were left on the glass where your lines just were
    and i was ashamed
    as chains were ashamed of their prisoners
    and shadow puppets performed for the gods of chance
     
  2. ripple23

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    hell yeah, those last two or so lines rule all others in this one.
     
  3. skyfire

    skyfire Member

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    thank you...i appreciate your comments as always ripple...

    i know there were others that read this...what do you all think?
     
  4. Fierce_Flawless

    Fierce_Flawless Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

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    you were always my fave skyfire (this is river btw, formerly takenbythewind)
     
  5. skyfire

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    OMG...hi...*waves frantically*...thank you very much...i always enjoyed your poetry too...it was always so smooth...now that i know who you are, i will look for you when i am in here!
     
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