Lozi kills Green(its a work in progress)

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  1. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    Death of Green

    As the pages unfurled,

    My weeping fingers grasped Green's once healthy tendrils.

    And nights silken-flavoured air,

    Set in Navy. Black. Silver,

    Commenced.

    Green, how could you fade?

    Green, how could you sleep?

    As your evergreen filigree died,

    I knew you were never fully alive.

    What was once a blossoming fir,

    Became now a dense, rotten, pungent stench.

    Smothering every other living thing,

    You devoured blue,

    Who you once adored.

    You crept up and stabbed your purple friend.

    Why, Green, why?

    It was either me or you, Green.

    The superficial light that you gave off,

    Came not from the heart,

    But from the glow of your devil eyes.

    Your corrupted figure.

    An everlasting,

    ever dominant,

    nodule on the side of white's petals.

    Her weak, docile frame

    Burdened by your viral scent.

    Oh Green, you astound me,

    I know not what you want,

    But all I know is that you are so lonely.

    You painted trees and grass alike,

    You paved the fields with a rusted gold.

    Was I ever in such a debt to you as to stop your breath,

    Green,

    With death?



     
  2. jesikhaviolet

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    its long, and its good... but it would be so much better if i knew what it meant
     
  3. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    well, it's the sequel to the poem 'green' who jaz made part of it a song also called 'green' for tankus. v good song. you may be able to find it in the main poetry forum or on my website http://www.freewebs.com/lozipot86 woop. visit and guestbook me baby! \m/ rock verily on
     
  4. jesikhaviolet

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    i know green - i've got his c.d here - i was meant to give it back, but he left manchester without a whole lot of warning =S
    but i'll still go on your site hunibee ^_^
     
  5. primevel_jm_livid

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    oh LOzlpot HUm.. I hadnt seen it.. I am crying .. green is so beautiful and to kill it .. is even beautifuller.

    THankyou for sunday nuzzles.. and every day nuzzles. you are warm and.. smell nice
     
  6. ArtLoveMusic

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    wow thats wikkid. I'll tell you one day what green reminds me of :) this death of green kindaalso fits with it but not perfectly cos tine changed it. but its still really awesome :)
     
  7. Lozi

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    wowser, um jess you smell nicer! you smell vague..and...delicious....
    thanks for commenting fleassykins:) i wish i could have been more brutal in my killage of green...hmmm...i sense a prequel? maybe birth or afterlife of green? praps....maybe that would just be going too far.....
     
  8. primevel_jm_livid

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    I have visions of.. *holds indexfingers to temples and HUmmmss*
    A resurrection.. ?

    a new dawn of green light rippling and pulsating and undulating and MMMmmmmm i feel even deliciouser now.
     
  9. Lozi

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    The Ballad of Green

    When Green caressed the ribbons of it's dream,
    the only beauty it could paint was false.
    It's undulated soul became obscene,
    Corruption, emminent, became the norm.

    As death and life came closer,
    love drew near.
    And ever silky, ever velvet sigh.
    The bask of Green's eternal, neversleep.
    Was interrupted, here and now, but nigh.

    The golden-gilded gates opened like hell,
    but Heaven's collective music kept Us well.
    For only in the dusk did Green elope,
    and lived again,
    lived again,
    to roam once more.
     
  10. Jaz Delorean

    Jaz Delorean Senior Member

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    beautiful...
    it is a lovely and horrific piece, lozi...
    cogs are whirring in my head as i cannot leave this one unsung! :D
    thanks for giving me permiss to do it, i'll get back to ya.
    :)
    keep writing, you have an amazing gift!! :D
    love jaz
     
  11. primevel_jm_livid

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    oh .. you used undulated.. Lozi i cant figure out poem yet .. Oh i wish for a brain.. Maybe i will go to the emerald city someday.. and find one.

    I feel like the 3 blind mice in far away idol.. singing.. ' i can see clearly now...'
     
  12. jesikhaviolet

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    how about "the life of green"? = P give this to a musician, and voila! concept album
     
  13. Lozi

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    but would it not be a bit bland, having an album solely focussed on one colour?
     
  14. primevel_jm_livid

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    but green... savagely devoured all the others, cruel but delicious
     
  15. jesikhaviolet

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    green's a pretty colour - aren't all mother earth albums focused on green?
     
  16. Lozi

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    hum..i guess so. what did you think of the 3rd one?
     
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