In Cover of Darkness

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by OneUndone, Feb 6, 2005.

  1. OneUndone

    OneUndone Member

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    I creep into your dreams at night
    and bring the shrieks which you aver;
    slinking thus in dim starlight
    I bang on pots and cause a stir.
    There is a chance, however slight,
    your visions will not pale and blur
    and you'll be left with phantoms bright
    of dancing waters, long impure.
    In midnight, tossing, never sure
    if white is black or black is white,
    you never reach an ending, quite.
    One thing you know, it isn't right
    if every moment leads to her
    and what those silver bells infer.
     
  2. Firebelle

    Firebelle Member

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    Love the last seven lines, they have that same quality I used to recognise in your work, something which makes me wonder of the inspiration behind your words. The first seven lines prompted a less than eloquent response of 'eh?' in me *sighs* I don't think I will ever learn. And you still write sonnets! I look forward to once again reading those, if you will continue to post.

    Hannah X
     
  3. Bhaskar

    Bhaskar Members

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    "...phantoms bright of dancing waters long impure..." a very Dan moment!

    I love you boy!
     
  4. saffronfrancisburnet

    saffronfrancisburnet Member

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    hi man,
    yet still we so forth to seek
    to hear what is there...................

    beautiful picture lifted from this emotion
    of raw needs...in your words.
    love n peace ffrom saff
     
  5. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    ~* Have to agree with Firebell on this one. I think I get it, but its like two different feelings in one poem. *~
     
  6. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    I’m glad gdhmomchild pulled this back up, since I’d missed it. What a great poem! I love the flow, how it begins with soft and smooth, and then seems to clamp down toward the end, which is just beautiful, and creates an image that will probably stick with me for a while. Wish you’d post more often, I’d love to read more of your work!
     
  7. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    couldnt help but miss a ton of stuff with the onslaught of *ehem* someones posts. Yeah danman... if nothing new, put up some older ones. You have plenty, post a few doit!doit!
     
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