ive been told im good at writing

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by swoosh, Nov 29, 2012.

  1. swoosh

    swoosh Member

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    i wrote this up quick.

    our vast society
    like the luster of charcoal
    the thrill of driving fast
    until you get busted with a big toll

    we all improve as we settle
    every step just to find a groove
    being calm almost seems clandestine
    until you step up; emotions get manifested

    crunching time grows old
    a 50 year old beard
    wont let you go cold
    until you heard the sun shine

    drop it all in due time
     
  2. roamy

    roamy Senior Member

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    niceone swo.welldone!:2thumbsup:
     
  3. swoosh

    swoosh Member

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    thank you; im gonna give reading and writing a chance
     
  4. Vanilla Gorilla

    Vanilla Gorilla Go Ape

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    As far as wordsmiths go, I think Thomas Hardy is up there, some ofhis books are kind of boring, but the phrasing alone makes you want to read them, you should have a look see. Very poetic

    Burroughs as well, William S not Edgar Rice, if you can comprehend that shit, you are doing well
     
  5. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    may you develop into a fine writer. best wishes mate
     
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