Random stream of conciousness..

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by MamaPeace, Nov 14, 2012.

  1. MamaPeace

    MamaPeace Senior Member

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    Uh yeah, this was automatic and has no thought to it, its just what came out if putting pen to paper..

    The woods won't echo when nothing remains,
    An inborn suffering experiencing majestic downfall,
    A dream of over shadowing the heavens and hell,
    Daylight misery through dark seeded November,
    Swallowing the sun because its stolen the night.
    Watching the forest grow shadow from the hanging garden,
    Provoking my silent awakening,
    As blood does drip from thine alter,
    An unholy funeral and I lend my soul as priest.
    Trapped in this darkness casting black where I stand,
    Mine is the kingdom that needs no power,
    Mine is the light which they all devour.
    Rise from yourn and come hither to mine,
    Interconnected by universal sparks,
    Flares of Autumn show a lack of perception,
    Whirlwinds are painful but only one hurts,
    Billions of atomic lifeforms originated from one energy,
    Feeling one agonising mistake starting somewhere down this lifeline.
    The resistance to change bares no gifts but coal,
    Draw from life but this is no lesson,
    Yearning isn't learnt until learning is no longer burden.
     
  2. Aerianne

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    Some good stuff, MamaPeace.
     
  3. PhotoDude

    PhotoDude Member

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    Lovely.

    Gotta love when words flow from pen to paper.
     
  4. QueerPoet

    QueerPoet Senior Member

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    These lines really knocked me out. This is very good work. :sunny:

    QP
     
  5. MamaPeace

    MamaPeace Senior Member

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    Thank you :)
    The subconscious writing almost puts itself together
     
  6. rambleON

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    Daylight misery through dark seeded November,
    Swallowing the sun because its stolen the night.
    Watching the forest grow shadow from the hanging garden,
    Provoking my silent awakening,
    As blood does drip from thine alter,
    An unholy funeral and I lend my soul as priest.

    LOve this
     
  7. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    really good words here, I love it. Post some more ?
     
  8. MamaPeace

    MamaPeace Senior Member

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    I'll post more when I get another random stream of conciousness :)
     
  9. Fairlight

    Fairlight Banned

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    That's really strong stuff!
     
  10. WolfLarsen

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    This is wonderful! Creative! Wow!
     
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