Sigh

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by *electrica*, Dec 17, 2004.

  1. *electrica*

    *electrica* Member

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    I love you
    Who you are
    The uncaring spell
    You've cast on me
    Entangled me
    In your loveless web
    Then walked away
     
  2. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    simple, and quite a summary... excellent word choices to evoke the larger story! :)
     
  3. KittenX

    KittenX Purrrific

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    I was irked by the word -loveless-...sure there is a better word to make that turn of a phrase more shining.
    But I like the way you presented this concept.
     

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