Dog

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by highasfawk, Oct 29, 2011.

  1. highasfawk

    highasfawk Member

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    Dog


    Theres this dog that I feed
    shreds of bread and of hay
    Its nothing I need
    But the dog never stays

    Maybe the dog was meant to be stray
    Maybe he wasn't meant to find love
    I dont know why he wont stay
    Knowing this, can god really be above?

    Is this dog meant to be alone?
    Will he ever find a home?
    Does no one love his golden tone?

    I hope this dog will find love one day
    but I doubt it
    Because this dog is like me in a way.
     
  2. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    lol, your last line saved this whole piece. it has a simple charm leading up to a somewhat disheartening ending. contrast, cool. Now, I can't say the build up was flawless but it got a reaction out of me...see ya where the red fern grows, buddy
     
  3. S-word

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    He was camped put on some no name creek
    He knew his time had come
    He was happy just to die out there
    Neath the Wattle tree and Gum.

    But we couldn't let him die that way
    Even though I think we knew
    That the doctors couldn't help him
    And there was nothing they could do.

    Yet, we brought him here so he could die
    In this nice clean sterile room
    Where he couldn't smell the fragrance
    Of the Wattle trees in bloom.

    And as I passed his room this morning
    With trembling voice he said to me
    "Please take me back to the place I love
    Where my spirit longs to be."

    "You can have my gold chain and my watch
    They're all I have to give.
    Plus this little book, in which I've writ
    All the things of worth I've did."

    "Then take this worn old body
    And let it die out there,
    Where the Wattle trees are blooming
    And their perfume fills the air.".................By S-word.
     
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