Insomnia.

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by McPhlegmagan, May 3, 2011.

  1. McPhlegmagan

    McPhlegmagan Member

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    Too late to-night— An aging plight
    does naught to bid me growth from blight,
    nor either kind brought to the mind;
    a source though I am loath to find
    the dwind’ling, ardent use thereof—
    per some eidolon from above?
    A sublime thought that I might claim
    in place of pride, in place of shame;
    to have and be most readily
    so as to sleep again.

    Of what could be outside this house?
    alone to me, and no one else
    of such restraint, such ignorance,
    ah such complaint, such wretchedness—
    who’d watch night rise from ground to sky
    while others eyes have yet to pry,
    too long asleep to hear the sound
    and watch, instead, from sky to ground;
    still caught in dreams full of redeem
    as kings with feelings crown’d.

    No, dreams are drugs— Awake, relapse.
    Mid-night is come, rife youth elapse
    free unto me; mine eyes to see
    thro’ rankled, wroughting reverie—
    that fill these halls with slow footfalls
    and leaves its scrawl upon my walls
    and drags me high out to the streets
    ‘til lithe moontide burns obsolete.
    O what there is outside that house,
    alone to me and no one else!
     
  2. blaino

    blaino Member

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    I love how you've captured the feeling of being content to having the silent night time world all to yourself.

    I feel like in the first bit you were expressing doubt, but would later find that there is nothing wrong with it. The feeling of peace that is.
     
  3. McPhlegmagan

    McPhlegmagan Member

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    Hey, thanks dog. I've received a similar opinion regarding this write's opening mood-- the subject matter has a way of purporting a certain lack in optimism, no? I've heard it seems to play out with a lighter tone by the third bit, unexpectedly so. I am glad for such an affect.

    Thanks for the feedback friend.
     

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