Who We Should Be (short poem)

scream at buildings
run at air
take off your clothes
let down your hair
live like this and you will see
this is who we all should be


<3 written July 14, 2010

 

help us understand. elaborate on the first two lines?

 

scream at buildings - cuz everyone in them is cooped up and needs to come outside and enjoy the world

run at air - well there's really not a big explanation for this because air is all around so it pretty much just means run around

 

I don't agree with your poem very much, but I don't have much criticism either.

Grammar and punctuation does make things easier to read; but other than that, it's a fine poem.

 

well, your poem makes sense, which is nice to see around these parts.

if flows nice.

And i really like the take off the clothes part.

nice job.

 

i think the best part of it is "let down your hair" because its like you dont care but in a good way, just letting go and living the good life.

 

The majority of homeless people in Manhattan?

 

I love running at air, so count me in.

 

i dig it

 

Eh, no offence, but it just reminds me of one of those "laugh like you've never.." whatever poems.

 

I really like this. It says a lot without saying a lot. Ernest Hemingway was good at that. Not many writers these days are.

 

Yes very good thanks for sharing it with us . It takes guts to post ones creative works .
Short and to the point . Poetry is the authors creative outlet and channel . It's really written for the author not the audience . So it's not a matter of the reader always having to "get it " . Nothing wrong with it being thought provoking . The reader must enter the authors mind , and apply their own interpretations . And many times it may be far different than what the author was saying in the first place . What's gold to one may be silver to another .