Psychedelic inspired spoken word.

I was recently at an outdoor day rave in San Francisco and was dosed on some lucy standing in a circle of people doing some spoken word. The poetry hit me deep and inspired me to start some of my own. Here is my first attempt, mostly based from a spirtual standpoint in my life right now:

If everything is based off perception,
then we must keep in mind illusion & deception
higher states of consiousness can be reached,
but a weak mind will be breached
searching for balance of right & wrong,
you must remain open but stay headstrong.
As the lost stoner stares at the stars,
the temptation preaching serpent bares no scars,
if a fool follows he is ignorant,
but if a wise man follows he must be beligerent.
Some commint sins strictly to repent
As prophets provide message that is godsent
However many look the other way,
Unbelievers to a pending jugement day.
Time takes no pause,
is there effect without cause?
Is all that was ever be,
how long will we take from the giving tree?
Before there is no stump to sit,
falling endlessly in a bottomless pit
begging for forgiveness with no remorse
Is like sailing a ship on a lost course.
I pray for peace on armagedion,
I hope all gods children go to heaven...


Feedback?

 

Did you reference a story called the giving tree? Not everyone may be familiar with it. Could you share it?

 

Shel Silverstein

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That was a nice wee video that