Breakdown

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Crimson, Nov 27, 2004.

  1. Crimson

    Crimson Member

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    This is one of the most personal poems if written its called BREAKDOWN

    Breakdown

    As I look at you it fills me with anger
    I feel the red start to take over
    My fists clenched tight
    I start to shake
    I fall to my knees and start to cry
    Why did it have to end this way
    Carrying this pain I don’t know what lies ahead
    Finding it hard to focus
    My mind is racing
    I feel the anger return with vengeance
    I wont let it end this way
    I cant let fear overcome me
    Hope is the only thing that drives me now
    As I scream my anger into the night
    I hope you know how I feel
    I hope you know the pain you have caused
    I strive to make things right
    I refuse to let this go
    By: Chris Grimm


    tell me what you think
     
  2. GirlInTheGreenGrass

    GirlInTheGreenGrass Member

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    You're hurt...You want pain in something else to let it feel yours. That's natural. But if on the other side of the room the person has their back to you, don't look at that.. Turn around...there's something so much better on the other side. Don't waste your time. Distract yourself and soon enough those distractions won't be distractions anymore. Let go of the anger by doing something good and filled of love...anything. Help a friend, by a xmas present for someone who doesn't have much...This is your world, make whatever you want out of it, but remember that time is ticking...and there is love to be given.
    <3
     
  3. Moonjava

    Moonjava Senior Member

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    Wow, sounds like you were at the end of your rope when your wrote this. Peace and healing!!
     
  4. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    From the Pain may we beget Transformation. Transmit it into the Shape of your Choosing. Would you choose to reciprocate it then as Pain, knowing what that Pain was to you? Who can say where the final impact of our vibrations rests, regardless of where we aim? Eh? Can you feel that emanation, behind you now, the tidal wave? What will be left in its wake? Elements, elements, elements. Re-arrange!

    eMBeMLaHV! :)
     
  5. GirlInTheGreenGrass

    GirlInTheGreenGrass Member

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    nicely said. :) And you're right, but it also has a lot to do with how we cope...how we deal with the situation...that's our aim. That's what predicts our final impacts.
     
  6. greaper

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    Short and Sweet

    Life is short. Why?
    Why is it so sweet and then taken away?
    Our ecperiences define who we are
    live life as a book and you will be remember as a book
    live it as an individual
    you are remembered as that indivudual
    short sweet and to the point...

    Life is hurtful. Why?
    So painful but never redemable
    our endurance ir our downfall
    the strong are taken advantage of
    and the weak are nothing
    painful but remembered
    short sweet and to the point...



    just one of mine let me know what you think
     

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