Kim's Krazy Poetry...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by hippie_chick666, Sep 6, 2007.

  1. hippie_chick666

    hippie_chick666 Senior Member

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    Crucify me

    Empty thoughts flood my mind
    filling the void of nothingness
    leaving me naked and exposed
    for all to crucify me for my beliefs
    while I wait for my salvation,
    never meant to appear to
    Save me from myself.

    Peace and love
     
  2. hippie_chick666

    hippie_chick666 Senior Member

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    Crucify me Part 2

    I am stripped naked,
    a lamb led for slaughter
    for your own perverse pleasure
    while you watch on your
    golden throne, ornate
    with lapis lupis and moonstone,
    so symbolic of your infinite wisdom
    as you condemn me for
    my beliefs that you are
    not the chosen one,
    for no one is more special
    than anyone else but
    my line of reasoning
    is out of line and
    out of touch
    with your reality.
    Hang me upon your
    cross of hatred
    and I will gladly
    come back for more
    if that means I can
    save one person
    from the dangers
    of your delusions.

    Peace and love
     
  3. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    I really like this poem. It's angry and powerful. I'm presuming it's a critique of over-zealous christians. Well written.

    Never give up. Never cringe. Never waver. Never falter. Stand up for what you believe in.

    Peace,
    A.
     
  4. hippie_chick666

    hippie_chick666 Senior Member

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    White whirling wisps of smoke
    billow from the butt of a cigarette
    while I inhale its sweet essence,
    allowing my mind to drift off
    into sweet nothingness.

    Peace and love
     
  5. hippie_chick666

    hippie_chick666 Senior Member

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    Leave me alone,
    broken and bloodied
    on the side of the street,
    lost in my infinite sorrows
    while my heart is torn,
    beating and bleeding
    from my deformed chest,
    with no hope of repair
    except by some glue
    will you help me inhale?
    I'm alone once again.

    Peace and love
     
  6. hippie_chick666

    hippie_chick666 Senior Member

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    The words that I am searching for
    cannot or will not have the ability
    to fully capture the state of my mind,
    my mental affairs, or my emotional state
    although I shall fumble for the perfect
    sounding syllables and imagery unmatched
    to convey the depths of my infinite sorrow,
    the self afflicted pain which I put myself
    through no fault of my own,
    blame bad genetics,
    blame a sadistic god,
    although I prefer to
    focus my energy on the
    former of the two.

    Let me refocus my aim
    back at the unending pain
    which eats at my aching heart
    and destroys my numb mind,
    reducing me from a person into
    simple neuron misfirings and
    dopamine levels out of balance.
    That is an easy explanation of
    why I am locked in my own
    personal heart shaped box
    but doesn't not provide the key,
    which would allow me to escape
    from the bipolar prison I'm within.

    Peace and love
     
  7. hippie_chick666

    hippie_chick666 Senior Member

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    ***Disclaimer*** I am not suicidal so don't take this poem as literal. It's just a creation from the darkest side of mind.

    This isn't eloquent and sweet,
    well worded or thought out.
    it's a glimpse into a tortured mind
    that might be too much to bear
    for the average audience
    who can't relate to the
    overwhelming pain of living
    a manic depressive life.

    Kurdt Kobain knew that burning and
    uncontrollable pain as well as I do
    and could express it much better
    as he did in his brilliant work of art,
    the ultimate cry for help called Milk It
    "Look on the bright side is suicide"
    a statement which is looking
    more and more attractive every day.

    What did Kurdt want to call his last release?
    I hate myself and I want to die
    That is how I feel tonight.
    I am tired of the seemingly
    bottomless pit of depression
    that appears to be my life.

    If life is an infinite ocean of experiences,
    then I am fucked because I can't swim,
    trying so desperately to stay afloat
    but drowning keeps looking better and better
    compared to the struggle of everyday life.

    I look at the pathetic state of my mind and poem
    and can only come up with one simple prayer,
    May I fall asleep and never suffer again.


    Peace and love
     
  8. redyelruc

    redyelruc The Yard Man

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    I think this excerpt is great. The simplicity of these first two lines is perfect. I'm lucky in that I can swim.... but sometimes I just forget how.

    Nice work Hippiechick.
    Keep posting.
    Peace,
    A.
     
  9. hippie_chick666

    hippie_chick666 Senior Member

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    Musings for the night...

    Trapped inside my mind,
    inside this world that was
    never meant to be,
    the creation of egotistical men
    with visions of power
    tainted with corruption.

    Examine the world and you can
    clearly see the shallowness,
    the emptiness of true meaning,
    everything has a price tag,
    these lies, the dream,
    are too expensive
    for the working man to buy.

    Image is truth in this society
    if seeing is believing.
    Sensationalism sells,
    Insanity reigns supreme
    when nothing makes sense,
    values and vice are interchangeable
    depending on what day it is.

    We see what we are shown
    and believe it is truth.
    We are given roles to play in this
    insane circus that so many buy into,
    purchasing that ticket without
    contemplating the cost.

    Individuality no longer exists
    when it is mass-marketed,
    purchased at any mall
    for the low cost of $39.99
    for a ripped pair of studded pants
    nails painted black,
    just another form of
    conformity.

    Those who truly stand out are ridiculed,
    pushed aside, ostracized from
    the right minded folks,
    innovation is dead until
    we embrace the value of creativity
    and the human spirit...
     
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    I really hope to see your work in print at a local bookstore someday. These are really wonderful. You have such talent...don't let it go to waste.
     
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    This is...truely amazing...and now one of my favorite poems. Right up there with Thoughts From Within by Woody Harrelson. Spectacular.
     
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