overwhelming

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by helen-maple, Nov 27, 2004.

  1. helen-maple

    helen-maple Member

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    uncovering.



    water,
    the heart
    eyes
    fingers
    making
    gestures
    unread
    confused
    tension
    orange
    blue

    i cannot relate
    what i imagine
    to be true

    come from love
    come from love.
    come from love....

    i falter.
    i fall
    in to the sadness.

    somewhere
    the moon
    is quiet
    above us.

    the sun is hidden
    behind clouds
    the ground.

    she moves me
    she knows me.

    i try desperately
    to keep you
    close
    to feel you breathing
    heart beating

    this full ness
    takes so much
    this sinking feeling


    thank you
    for all
    youve given me.

    even this,
    which
    is overwhelming.
     
  2. LivinNreflection

    LivinNreflection Member

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    Ohh I liked that. When I was reading it, it made me go "aaaww" Good poem I liked it! Thanks for sharing it.
     
  3. GirlInTheGreenGrass

    GirlInTheGreenGrass Member

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    I liked how you reffered to your feelings to orange and blue. To me it gave almost an ora presence. I liked how you gave love a description. "even this,
    which is overwhelming." Great poem:)
    <3
     
  4. kidder

    kidder Member

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    The middle has a wonderful cadence. The rest of it struggles to catch up.
     
  5. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

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    Orange and Blue indeed. Quite a Proper time to be espousing such a creed. I burnt the Sun and the perfumes thereof, and there was Love.


    I am gladdened in my Heart by your awe.

    A whisper; a tremor. There is no difference.

    eMBeMLaHV! :)
     
  6. saffronfrancisburnet

    saffronfrancisburnet Member

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    hi there

    what long days we view ,from sunrise to sunset.
    the colours within all.

    overwhelming life can be,with all its beauty
    beauty that shines from us all.

    thank you for this enlightening piece
    i love the change from head to heart
    your words of chosen verse.

    gestures
    unread
    confused.


    you know this journey already..........


    thankyou
    love npeace from saff
     
  7. helen-maple

    helen-maple Member

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    thanks so much for the comments,

    especially saff, you always help me to understand what ive put acrossed, and understand my own words better,

    love and light
     
  8. Hippievixen

    Hippievixen Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    I got this drowning feeling when I read the first stanza, which was your intention, from the title of the poem. Very powerful.
     
  9. Free as a bird

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    I liked its emotion yet simplicity
     
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