A song and a poem

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by spoctopus, May 19, 2010.

  1. spoctopus

    spoctopus Member

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    a song and a poem, feel free to state your opinion!
    Song (no name yet)
    Our only fault is
    we aimed for perfection
    when I found the map
    I threw out your suggestions
    Right place, Right time
    Just the wrong directions
    I had all the awnsers
    before you made corrections
    I'm the gas, and life is the ignition
    but my words are my only ammunition
    You say I'm one in a million
    so there is six thousand of me
    I'm glad I dont know them because
    I am my own worst enemy
    Today is now but it's
    just tommorows history
    I'm just following clues
    to find a mystery
    I'm the gas and life is the ignition
    but my words are my only ammuntion
    I made a sharp right
    because nothings left
    It's late, time for bed
    but lifes a dream and I have already slept
    Like a tree I drown in my own creation
    and your waste was all I kept.​
    Poem-dogs
    The master snaps his finger
    step like dogs into place
    stop and give all attention
    so you can get a treat
    or even a "good boy"
    thinking is murder
    barking is obscene
    sit and lay down quietly
    live in the land of the free
    and shake hands with hypocrisy.​
     
  2. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    I like the first poem becase I think it was well thought out and it flowed well. Nice job.
     
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