Poetry newbie. Free verse.

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by mindtraveling, Apr 20, 2010.

  1. mindtraveling

    mindtraveling Member

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    So I was sitting on my deck earlier drinking wine and smoking, and I thought why have I never tried writing poetry before? So here is what I came up with :) Is this poetry or just random thoughts? Any constructive criticism is very welcome thanks y'all :D

    My mouth, a dry bitter taste of fermented grapes
    My shoulders facing the sun opening my heart
    I feel distinguished, happy I am
    For I am in tune with my soul
     
  2. Sweetleaf63

    Sweetleaf63 Senior Member

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    sounds like a great creative first poem to me:)
     
  3. Zorba The Grape

    Zorba The Grape Gavagai?

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    Yeah, not bad at all for a first attempt.
     
  4. sentastorm

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    pretty good
     
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