Square Sticks and Velvety Texture.

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by inbloom, Feb 18, 2010.

  1. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    Just written now. Based on a friend's photo album.

    The hanging lights of orange
    under sky, yet above me, sings.
    Peeking around a corner,
    whisping down stairs.
    Everything was
    square sticks, and
    velvety texture.
    Her shadow kept images
    of everything and told
    secrets from that night.
    I was reminded.
    This was every park and
    every street corner I ever
    knew, too.

    --jacobus, '10.
     
  2. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    What's the feeling?

    What's the message?

    What's this soposed to be?

    help me by answering these.
     
  3. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    The feeling would be a night time adventure through the downtown of your hometown, years after moving away. The message, if there is a clear one at all, is nostalgia. This is supposed to be a reflection of a friends photo album, which documented aforementioned downtown adventure.

    Sorry I've been throwing a couple "foul balls" your way, Rambleon. Or that pretty much everyone on the forum has. Maybe you should relax a little on the criticisms. While they are healthy for one's art, the outright dick attitude you deliver them with is uncalled for.
     
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