a poem i based on a tarot card

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by pinkfloyd666, Feb 8, 2010.

  1. pinkfloyd666

    pinkfloyd666 Banned Underage!

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    at the judgement
    the angel blows his horn
    and the people greyed by sin
    call out to god, th his scorn

    men, women, and children alike
    are utterly destroyed
    by their own folly

    the beautiful angel of death
    looks at them and screams
    "YOU SINNERS! WHAT HAVE YOU DONE?"

    "we have destroyed ourselves, by our folly"
    "we beg of you, forgive us"

    to god's amusement
    they perish

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    try and guess which card :p
     
  2. Zorba The Grape

    Zorba The Grape Gavagai?

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    Not bad, actually. You might want to clean up the mechanics a bit, and maybe make a few alterations. I think it has potential.
     
  3. pinkfloyd666

    pinkfloyd666 Banned Underage!

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    what do you mean by mechanics?
     
  4. pinkfloyd666

    pinkfloyd666 Banned Underage!

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    oh, spelling errors
     
  5. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    Love to see what the Empress has to say...
     
  6. JethBroh

    JethBroh VikingAmbasador

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    I Like :nopity:
     
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    pinkfloyd666 Banned Underage!

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