This has the air of a tragedy in the making, but the story is unresolved. The reader is left hanging, wondering how things are going to to turn out. The story would be improved if the issues were decided by the end of the story. Whether Margaret should have gotten involved or not (I would suggest not) might vary from one reader to the next. In my experience, the rudeness and hostility happening in this piece is very unusual. I would find it more believable if the rudeness were coming from some institutional type such as law enforcement. See my thread, Activism/Protest/On Pigs. Of course, experiences differ.
I appreciate it as it is.Of course one person may express certain situations a little differantly or construct sentences in another way---however ,that would be someone elses story then ,wouldn't it? I liked it and if it's done--so be it.If not,I shall return.
Exactly. The issues aren't decided. The story is based on an actual incident I observed. But I don't think that really matters.
