The Disease

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Matt12354, Aug 12, 2009.

  1. Matt12354

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    Gaia is plagued by a disease,
    It is obliterating her appendages,
    It is massacring her children,
    It is changing her chemical being,
    It is leaving unsightly marks, abrasions, and swellings on her body

    What is this powerful force destroying Gaia?
    What is responsible for the desecration of this living organism we call Planet Earth?...

    The human being.
     
  2. rambleON

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    I liked how you had a twist at the end, and maybe, just maybe you caught the reader by surprise...in that, they thought Gaia was a human...

    nice twist, but i saw it coming.
     
  3. Matt12354

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    Gaia is actually the Greek godess of the earth, so a twist was not intended. I was hoping to personify earth as a living organism for two reasons. One, because that is how I personally view earth. And two, because it directs more compassion from the reader towards the subject matter. Thank you for the feedback on the poem, it is much appreciated.
     
  4. rambleON

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    Of course, now i understand. Your explanation gives this new meaning to me. thanks.
     
  5. scontreras2142

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    hey man i really liked it...i honestly didnt know who that godess was till you cleared it up...

    check mine out and tell me what you think...it runs beside yours.

    i believe i titled the thread "you inspire me"
     
  6. Matt12354

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    Thanks. I'll def check it out and leave feedback. It'd be great if you could check out my other one, it's called naked meditation, it's on the next page.
     
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