free verse

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by goingtocalifornia, Jul 1, 2009.

  1. goingtocalifornia

    goingtocalifornia Banned Underage!

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    You creep through the door
    And up the stairs
    Completely aware,
    You move a lock of my hair
    From where it lay,
    Strewn across my sleeping face.

    I awake.
    Unstartled
    By your expressionless face
    Peering down at me
    Through the dimmest of light

    Would i like to ride with you?
    I think i just might.





    be honest.... how bad is it?
     
  2. spirit of the night

    spirit of the night Senior Member

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    I like it :) it is simple and sweet, capturing those little moments that are so precious.

    Keep writing!
     
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