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None-In-Three

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by April90, Jun 6, 2009.

  1. April90

    April90 Member

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    I press the button and renew
    The page with someone's masterpiece.
    I see a so-called review
    Of letters less than letters missed.
    The comment's author claims to be
    A bard, a critic and a muse.
    This three-in-one, or none-in-three
    Can't get the core of someone's views,
    Of thoughts in their poetic flight.
    Yes, it is hard - they tend to flee,
    But it's the artist's one true might
    To see what other eyes can't see,
    And poets for a day or two,
    Who shape a random phrase by chance,
    Who haven't proved a sentence true,
    Just have no right to set demands
    For those who ponder, dare and speak,
    Who search, discover and create.
    Their fame is yet to reach its peak,
    And as for you, it's way too late.
     
  2. neodude1212

    neodude1212 Senior Member

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    I like it, but perhaps instead of speaking in complete sentences, you should just forget the grammer and speak more freely in order to improve the overall flow of the poem?
     
  3. April90

    April90 Member

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    The flow doesn't need to be improved, it's perfect.
    As for grammar, it's essential, if it's ignored, crap is whatyou get instead of poetry.
     
  4. neodude1212

    neodude1212 Senior Member

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    lol ok
    sorry to interp
    ur
    perfect
    pome
     
  5. rambleON

    rambleON Coup

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    duh, neo don't you know anything. you can't tweak perfection.
     
  6. April90

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    I know more than you, evidently.
     
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