A little something I wrote

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  1. Daaku Raani

    Daaku Raani Member

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    Like a dagger through my soul, you embrace me
    The bleak days and nights suddenly turn to color
    You go deeper and deeper, the pain and the pleasure almost unbearable
    My eyes wander seeking for something meaningful
    You slowly seep into the nothingness that is inside of me
    My tears give you pleasure, my weakness fuels your lust
    Your eyes begin to follow your imagination
    As the blood begins to trickle down my breast
    You smirk with an excited look on your face
    With a feeling of pride you know you have done what you had to do
    Your attention suddenly locks onto the object in a pool of blood
    You begin to feel the cold metal, fiddling with the trigger
    Looking at me as I begin to whimper, begging for forgiveness
    You close your eyes with a single tear rolling down your face
    With a gut-wrenching plea for forgiveness, it’s done.
    You’re gone, and it feels like it never happened.
    Waking up, I look around, seeing nothing
    My insides feel as if they’re painfully fading away
    Stumbling towards the mirror I begin to weep
    As my reflection tells me, he went too deep.



    Thought it would be the best way to introduce myself..
     
  2. NotDeadYet

    NotDeadYet Not even close.

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    This is quite unique. Coming from a country where English is not the primary language, it is surprisingly good.
     
  3. white dove

    white dove Member

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    i enjoyed it what was the msg, was it about love and cheating or someting along thoes lines
     
  4. Daaku Raani

    Daaku Raani Member

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    Not Dead Yet: Thanks =]

    White Dove: It wasn't really about anything in particular, I closed my eyes and then wrote down what I saw.
     
  5. white dove

    white dove Member

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    wow thats a great talent to have, ill have to work on my one skill like that
     
  6. Daaku Raani

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    Thank you :)
     
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