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Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Hippievixen, Oct 19, 2004.

  1. Hippievixen

    Hippievixen Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    All smiles
    Good times
    And sunny vibes,
    Obligation compels me
    To contribute a Sunbeam
    To the monotonous oblivion
    affectionately coined
    'the general public.'

    rare rainbow ripping through electric azure
    i shimmer and glimmer slowly,
    so all can catch a glimpse.

    Some stare with curiosity,
    Others talk amongst themselves.

    As for me, I'll just hover overhead
    Like a honeybee
    The clouds my pillow
    And the sky a blank canvas for my dreams.
     
  2. Hippievixen

    Hippievixen Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    A poem I wrote a few years ago, one of my better ones!

    Nice to meet ya'll!
     
  3. when 2 roads meet

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    That's really good, the idea is great and then just the way the words play makes it even better.
     
  4. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    Positive unique vibe. Forget homogenizing, you will never be both awake and general. Yes, both rare, colorful and energetically dynamic... dream on. Paint with bold bright strokes and fill the environment with your love and freedom. Forget what people say with voices that don't come from within. You have your center, not in defining yourself as different but in remembering what all live truly is... shimmering energy which loves and dreams. Turn up the volume!
     
  5. Hippievixen

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    I'm glad that you were diggin' it!

    Where are you from?? Native Texan here.
     
  6. kidder

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    I like the closing lines. Flow enriched with vibrant images. Just watch out for that old bugaboo, the cliche. You'll be all right!
     
  7. maryjaneguitargurl

    maryjaneguitargurl I am just like you.

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    Wow. I really love the last sentence. "and the sky a blank canvas for my dreams" Thats beautiful.

    peace
    chickens
     
  8. sylvanlightning

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    Well, I lived in Austin for 3 years then my Father graduated from UT and we moved to New Orleans, where I stayed for 12 years. I moved to NC to go to college and have been up here in the triad area of North Carolina for the last 10, or so, years.
     
  9. Hippievixen

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    Austin is a beautiful city. The best city in Texas, really. Have you ever been to Hippie Hollow on Lake Travis? :) I went twice this summer... it's worth the drive!

    I've also visited New Orleans several times. It was lovely.
     
  10. rainbowkid

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    I really like the Bee image you had at the end, 'And the sky a blank canvas for my dreams' I really like that line. Nice one 'Hippievixen'.
     

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