Thanks Mary. And Lein...it goes with a poem I'm writing. I could post the poem when I'm done if you'd like to help you better understand. It's basically about man versus self internal struggle and choosing a "good" or "evil" path...fighting to redeem...or dying in misery and regret.
A bit all over the place...was probably fucked up when I wrote it. Here it is: The flowers are fading. My trip has worn off. Reality facing, Front, full force. Hatred, inevitable. I fear she's warped me. Lusty satanic, Dripping of sex, Those murderous, Hypnotic eyes. I've blamed the sinners, Glared down upon, The hedonistic. But look at me now. Am I not a thrill-seeking, Desperate, low-life, Dreg of humanity? Altered states, And my hope, Of an all-knowing, Can not help me now. These steep steps, Lead so purposefully, To the brokendown alley, Of my demise. The darkness shines, Even much greater, Than the light. But once more I try, In hopes of a sign: Dear God, I'm a hypocrit. For I am not even worthy, Of those I have shamed. A street light comes on, A glimpse of hope... Toward the alley wall, The light strayed, Only to show the carvings, Of my desperate days... My past.
I like it so much, especially right side of the pic. It reminds me art design of new media in fusion with old grunge style Also like lyrics. Need to have some music
yeah the poetry is good. It would make a good song edit: I read it again and I really like the poem. There are some parts that don't feel as rhythmic as they should, but I Like a lot of the things you said and the ways you said them. The last verse really stands out too.
Thank you very much infinito and I appreciate the constructive criticism too...and I agree. This is a first draft. I really never post poems until I feel 100% about them, but I really wanted to explain the artwork. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Hey, awesome. It's good that you do more than one draft. I do that too and it seems like other people don't for some reason. Make sure you post the other drafts so we can read them!
