Just wanna know wut u guys think...

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by DreaFloyd, Oct 15, 2004.

  1. DreaFloyd

    DreaFloyd Member

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    I wus kinda down last night, I wrote three poems and i just wanna know wut u guys think... dont worry about being harsh or wut ever, just wanna have some kinda opinion.

    Trapped
    How do u get it out,
    When it’s making u drown
    It’s tearing u apart
    And the ones u love, try reaching out
    As u can’t hold back
    On what you always thought was there
    The only way out,
    Is the one u make for yourself
    By hurting even more
    As u slowly become numb
    Of what people made you feel so far
    Laying there, in your blood, in your pain,
    You finally feel so free,
    And you’re realize,
    You were never gone.


    Freedom hurts

    Looking at the city,
    It’s all dark and windy,
    I am swinging back and forth
    On this abandoned park
    And feel like the kid i’ve never been.
    Bohemian Rapsody reminds me i’ll never be free,
    But i am floating in my few minutes of fantasy,
    My bare feet sink into the damp ground as i swing by
    And I remember all my pain will one day get by
    Those moments just make me wanna live,
    As I’ve always wanted to get down and cry.

    Dying on the inside

    I am sitting in this park,
    And as I watch them play,
    I try remembering where I’ve never been.
    It feels like I’ll never get to share wut I have to say
    Seems like people don’t wanna care anways.
    I am sick of lying to myself, sick of smiling to hide
    Behind those memories dragging me down
    And giving me so much pain.
    I just wish someone could listen
    And stop judging what is not.
    I’m just asking for a shoulder to cry on
    A friend to rely on
    I just wish i could be loved back
    As i watch every one around
    Enjoying wut i don’t allow myself to feel anymore
    As long i’ll never be able to get it out
    This is an ongoing circle of pain
    That only death could make me free
    But i don’t wanna hurt the few once who actually love me J

    Thnx for those who'll respond...
    Drea
     
  2. ElChivato

    ElChivato SeNioR MeMBeR

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    yeah. that was beautiful. especially 'dying on the inside'. i love them.
    peace
     
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