Freedom

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by weaselpop, Aug 7, 2008.

  1. weaselpop

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  2. teh-horace

    teh-horace for your pleasure

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    i don't know about "breeze block" but i mostly entirely enjoyed this

    i dig the makingofmorewordsoneword and the let's-string-together-words-with-hyphens, atually

    it's obvious you pay attention to your linebreaks

    i also really like the last stanza

    maybe the semi-colon use is a little too liberal

    i think my favorite part for some reason is simply the "needtobegood"

    makes me want to start a band called The Needtobegoods
     
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