Scattered

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by LivinNreflection, Oct 6, 2004.

  1. LivinNreflection

    LivinNreflection Member

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    Confused, sad, don't know what to do
    Cheerful, happy, going out of control
    Tears running down the face
    Dried eyes with a smile
    Blurry and lost
    Clear and found
    Depression, taking over
    Pills to correct, wrong
    Shut down and pushed away
    Came back, thrown down
    Disappiontment, all heard
    Something nice, just a chance
    It's not happening
    Stop, and kept dreaming
    Woke up, burnt eyes
    Lost, and followed
    But who knows
    Falling down, stomped into the ground
    Broken again
     
  2. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    It gets better hun~! The three lines I liked.

    Stop, and kept dreaming

    Lost, and followed
    But who knows
     
  3. LivinNreflection

    LivinNreflection Member

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    Thank you for responding. I want more people to so I can know what all of you think of it.
     
  4. kidder

    kidder Member

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    'Woke up, burnt eyes...' My fav part! I like your emphasis on contrasts here because in the end life really is a muddle. We can only hope to understand it when we realize it doesn't make any sense.
     
  5. LivinNreflection

    LivinNreflection Member

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    AAWWW thank you for the comment. "Woke up, burnt eyes" That's my favorite part too.
     

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