Fly

Okay, a second post. Here goes:

It's October and yr scary, gyrl,
Yr hair's brush before the fire
Tobermory's in yr eyes
Its stark shores, its dark skin
Yr smile's a molten wire
Yr lips a bowl
Where magic's been.

I love yr moondipped fingers
The silver on yr hands
The way night folds about yr form
Moulds you perfectly,
The way you stand-
And gaze out preternaturally
Back at it again.

Sylvan and lithe
Yr immaterial
Stars sparkle in yr bones
Darkness swallows up yr heart
Yr almost home-

And
All I wann
All I wann
Is to hold yr hand
Before you fly

 

Very nice, sleek and shimmery, translucent and void... interesting contractions and of course, seasonal. Cheers.

 

sounds like a sixties folk song, but whatdoes preternaturally mean?

 

Another solid post, kidder... I echo sylvan's comments, and the second stanza really made this one for me.

And purusha, preternaturally means:

1. Out of or being beyond the normal course of nature; differing from the natural.
2. Surpassing the normal or usual; extraordinary.
3. Transcending the natural or material order; supernatural.

 

Absolutely loved this but for me, everytime I hit a yr it takes that moment for my brain to fill in whats not there...broke the flow for me. Thats why I usually reread poems though. Deffinitely glad I came back to reread this one. Thanks~!

 

yeah not sure about the shortened words! but I really enjoyed in particular the first stanza so let's do that again....

"It's October and yr scary, gyrl,
Yr hair's brush before the fire
Tobermory's in yr eyes
Its stark shores, its dark skin
Yr smile's a molten wire
Yr lips a bowl
Where magic's been. "

really cool. thanks

 

i agree w/ gdhmomchild...the lack of the word breaks the flow and i found my mind wandering a bit b/c i was focusing on replacing yr w/ your and lost the meaning of the rest of the words....

if that makes any sense at all......i dont really know....i think that is how i wanted to say it.

 

hey it didnt throw me much, that -yr- . sort of gave the poem an accent to me.