cutting, a dark rain cloud. ur all alone in a circle room, tryin to find ur way out. No door, no one with u, just u in a black n scarey room. u try to stay calm, but u r starting to lose ur mind... in ur pocket, a razor u find. u keep cool for a few more moments, then its all gone. u make a wish that sumone will find u, just then, he walks in. He came to save u in a dark n scarey place, but then he realizes that its to late. He crys n moans will holding u tight, just then he sees light. He is sitting in a white glow with u next to him U tell him that he will be fine, but he cant hold on for the rest of time.
if u r cunfused bout my poem this is wut it is saying........ Cutting is like a dark room on a rain cloud, and when ur all alone, thats wut u do alot(at least, im always alone, so i tend to cut)... when u least expect..... the luv of ur life walks in on u right after u killed urself n ur spirit tell him he needs 2 move on. Pls reply about this poem
sweetie,in all honesty this poem would be taken much more seriously if you used "you" and "you're"... ...just my opinion. Please don't be offended. The piece had a nice concept,but I wasnt fond of the overall presentation. Keep on writing tho! Im sure you'll do a piece sometime that will blow the others away
right now.... im not offended by wut u guys said.... u guys r just tryin to help.... n if u cant notice.... im kinda lazy n i dont care bout spellin everything out cuz i think its kinda dumb..... but i will surely do it next poem i write..... thank u for the info
A friend of mine just said that "even reading this post is like too much work"...and I tend to agree. You should probably care more about your "spellin everything out" because it makes you look much more intelligent and people will take your posts more seriously.
I'm sorry...the thread after the poem was too much...what...the word is what. Please save the cyber shortcuts for the IM buddies. None of this is done to hurt your feelings. Notice please that nobody has said anything bad about the poem itself. Theres a time and a place for all things and shortcuts to the english language are better saved for IM's or for some chatrooms. Hell, how hard is it to add a few letters. Even in hippychat almost everyone uses words, a few cyber abbreviations but when we type we use the words. y wood this b ne better. ne 1 can seem dum. i c kids doing this and they think its gr8 but wut ur showing me is ur either too laz or need to learn to spell. Are you truly too lazy to take a minute more? Isn't your poetry worth it? Isn't the time we are willing to spend and respond worth it?
