i thought you were on my side in this fixed game of days my girl for good and worse times spent at least together, or drunk and collapsing or naked and spiteful in the slick neon of a Parkdale night but there are no boundaries on this trust of fate...only tossed coins in supermall wishing wells...only small splashes and wrong endings only broken words over a broken phone line because i was so far away that the syllables couldn't make the stretch...and your accent became a sudden weapon registered on my voicemail... boom boom and a flatline
you nailed it, edible. 'naked and spiteful in the slick neon' that is a beautiful flow. and that ending 'boom boom and flatline'. you've gotten better with age, mon frere.
I love your style!! It's so fresh. And the way that first stanza flows is just breathtaking. (at least in my head) And I agree with Nick, the ending was explosive (heh)
