Contingency in Event of a Monumental Collapse

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  1. Verisimilitude

    Verisimilitude Member

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    CONTINGENCY IN EVENT OF A MONUMENTAL COLLAPSE

    I. Preliminary Years

    nor does this waning winter
    sun warm faces
    and love is everything
    that it is cracked up to be

    dog-ear the page and cut the letter “g” in
    shadows

    (so permanent a stain) day seeps the liquid cloud, can
    crack the month-old ice on front porch railings – such January glass
    forgets the sun.

    Appears a moonlit space – so men can wander
    the final bastion of an undivided life

    In color’s subjectivity blue becomes midnight to
    beholder number two and each minute stands
    isolated and seconds
    that are blue (irreconcilable to white or non-white seconds)

    when all the fossils between us would
    become
    the room in which I stand,
    small, facing up
    the long, twisted staircase

    a shattered yelp warped jowls
    teeth like trunks of solid ivory trees

    A landing drenched in halogen.

    where is time, in my dreams and in my night-time wastes
    cloaked in white like polished paper
    or new canvas – painted concrete stained by morning sunshine

    when I awake unrestored by night’s engineers–
    their processes that flood the land with skies and cities where men sleep, or move
    like painted protozoa
    broken bridges regenerate like lizard’s tails suspended over rivers over
    sweeping air that pools and curls

    formerly I bathed in open oceans (the deep cobalt expanses) with a shelf of living coral to support my
    weight, over years cracks eliminate the step and continents expand/contract to break and build
    peaks then grinding them to dust,
    day leans upon my eyes,
    lost in isotonic rain


    the breezes drape over sparsely collected spires,
    spiraled points out of granite
    callusing the net of winter, ice cascades in fountains
    retching dusty remnants down to streets, shattered beams won’t support the high
    peaked roofs
    that tumble,

    now


    it is graphite, not the moon through a filter, but
    ordinary graphite, dulled and full of fiber
    you shook

    in breezes,
    the epoxy of a city as it reforms to slag and
    crooks toward your fingers, claws

    read the slender delineations – arcs that crawl about on cracking
    earth, substantial
    or some markings colored khaki like a prince

    I am careful – each hour rises out
    of sequential digits hovering in

    and I spot the snow out basement windows,
    thinking along lines like
    snow and art
    spattering like blood
    or the discharge of mucous when we look closely enough (meaning to hold
    up the head of your guest, his eyelids
    barely move) after he charges down
    the staircase
    believing it to be
    vertical in the strange horizontal way that Ithaca
    was an island
    yet owned cattle, men, and tongues.

    Also sad is the speech of humans fusing (in
    fundamental honesty)
    with various household objects, a category
    containing Clorox wipes, broken chair legs
    my notebook where I write
    That drafty rooms are James Tate’s future ghost explaining he will only stay
    in town another week before blowing
    smoke rings over the space-time continuum




    II. The Landmark Tumbles



    Sending tools like a dram of white whiskey
    to a place where tools are useless
    as the tram trundles about on iron islands

    freezing occurs
    during the final entry
    (the softest stone)

    Contrasting the bones of megafauna in my bathtub
    sums the category of hills
    that twist to turquoise galleries:
    escape from knowledge and hives full of eyes
    openings in the earth act as portals, the way-station window
    exposes stones and glass
    like a watercourse trailing a mountain’s ridge

    A room suspended in the city
    glossed cement block is wearing its hair like a metal bunk and toilet
    like rays of
    glass exploding, the sun
    rubs sore tendrils over windows in observance
    as a child dons an adult skin
    and sees the dying day through double panes.

    Enter: the retrograde motion of planets and
    the son of celestial phenomena
    exploding giants and their radiating black night

    I send a hollow eye
    extend a screen that is silver, unsupported
    across supposed stars

    If the chalked lines above spelled out
    the suggested colors for weaving (now
    called animation) turn,
    spin as bobs of thread attached to
    planetary axes

    No more light, only
    color spreads

    the room is full and smooth as a motor locks and whines
    sliding shut the door
    dividing the street,

    An overlap, when the clandestine grey cement

    existing
    like language
    in a vacuum
     
  2. Verisimilitude

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    Hey everyone,

    This originally came from an exercise based on Bernadette Mayer's Midwinter Day which she created by writing without stopping (except for the ocassional sandwich/bathrom break) for an entire day, and then edited the result.

    I wrote for about 12 hours without stopping and came up with some 15 pages of raw text which I then edited down to this. Unfortunately, it wasn't originally left justified. It spread out upon the page in order to preserve the sound quality I was searching for, but when I entered it in to this thread, it forced me to justify it. Oh well.


    This poem was written to try to answer a question with which I am rather obsessed: what can we do to cope with things when eventually our lives/our world/our ideas/our dreams come crashing down around us?

    Hope you enjoy.

    -V
     
  3. Vetty214

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    Hi V. I'm not sure how old you are, but that question about coping with life's reality (look up learned helplessness - a poem topic I've been wresting with) seems to be something that a lot of folks are focused on. First of all: applause. Wow, what a feat and what a chore! My favorite part (and trust me, I didn't do you justice! I read it here online and then finally printed it out and then spent another 20 minutes or so... reading parts of it over and over as I was folding laundry). It was impressive to think of you writing this over a 12 hour period and then getting it down to this. There are lots of good images/thoughts... so far my favorite is: "when all the fossils between us would/become/the room in which I stand" - now that is awesome! I wish I had some helpful advice. The only thing that comes to me is "coordinates"... That's a Billy Collins point in getting a poem to work better for the reader. It seems to need some kind of thread to link it altogether. Not sure if the thread could be your use of water kinds of words, you use "liquid, ice, drenched, flood, bridges, rivers, pools, coral, rain, etc." So those images are strong and maybe you can grab those and strengthen that throughout to tighten it up. Again, wow! Keep writing, you are great!
     
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