His Dance Warmth emanating your eyes alit, then the smile that melts all resevations and finds me smiling back. (Even if I don't feel like it) Motion starts deep and sultry rythms as old as time. Poetry in motion, gliding,quicker,stronger,bolder, 'til I'm lost in the dance with you. _______________ Mind Set No judge, no jury A lynch mob of one Hung by facts that aren't Left to twist slowly Truth can't set me free when you won't listen _______________ Harmony vs Discord Those warm and tender moments when you forget to hate me harmonizes that union. Moments that I live within the ebb and flow, that golden glow I carry that with me through the dark times when you remember you are trying to hate me. _______________ Haiku (repost from another thread) Essences of life like a river to the sea crash, wend but still flow
Harmony vs. Discord was my favorite of your bunch... very enjoyable read and quite powerful. My one suggestion would be to make your third line "harmonizes that union" or "harmonizes union" or just put a colon after "hate me:" I loved the haiku too... to me, haiku's aren't just 5-7-5; they really is a true art to them, and this one reflects that... thanks for that
Thank you so much~! I took you up on the suggestion. You're kind words and help are very welcome and appreciated. Feel a bit better that I'm managing to write something again. Everything was coming out angsty and clique. ~*pffffft!*~
~* Thanks so much~! Appreciate the responses. I have a tendancy to be shy about posting what I've written. Especially when I see the quality so many of you write at.*~
