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from The Accoustic Movement of Landscapes

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Verisimilitude, Apr 21, 2008.

  1. Verisimilitude

    Verisimilitude Member

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    Tightness



    Used the curves of hat boxes
    Fled corners, shattered
    Panes of yellow glass

    Somehow an unequal silence:
    You were lying awake as
    The furnace ceased to beat
    And dawn’s blue reflected light bathed in
    Your cotton’s warmth

    When the blue was a palpable
    Blue. When the curtain
    Was torn from
    White-blue space
    The cold had directed echoes,
    Prepared to land its messengers
    In the hollow-white moons
    Of your bones
     
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    Verisimilitude Member

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    I'm new to this particular part of Hip Forums, but am an avid poet, and am interested in any comments that those here may care to share with me.


    This is a part of a series of poems I am working on, and I will post more of them on this same thread as I finish revisions.

    Looking forward to getting to know many of you fellow poets through the fruitful exchange of ideas and language
     
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    ABLAZE

    The placement in rows could
    Spark a dozen
    Hot curls
    of magnesium
    (there! on the granite by
    Some claim
    Providing an unmistaken
    Ache of green
    My emeralds just
    break, and balsam’s
    Meant for the stage set)
    You’d go
    Fetch me Columbia
    And along with
    Her rough stone
    the conquered
    blaze-drip crowds
    cockatiel red on umber.
     
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