pale stars

could i reach high enough
with my hand and pluck one
from this cobalt and pink sky
many more i would pull from the heavens
like prometheus stealing fire from the gods
i would pull every star from the sky.

 

Punctuation? I think it would be more effective. And I think "pink and cobalt" souns better.

I quite like it, though.

 

..why though? anybody would like to fly..

 

fuck punctuation

 

Pretty!

 

thanks for your kind words
and thoughts

 

It's about flying?

 

Awesome flying poem.
suggestions
1 Switch 'pink' and 'cobalt'; reads smoother.
2 Switch 'would' and 'I' in line 4
Punctuation not necessary.
Awesome! Keep writing.

 

thanks