nekkbone

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by jim the carpenter, Apr 10, 2008.

  1. jim the carpenter

    jim the carpenter Member

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    daytime is like a bullet lodged

    in my nekkbone
    twilight is soft
    perfect and black
    darkside i feel it
    in my soul
     
    jim the carpenter, Apr 10, 2008
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  3. skyfire

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    hmm...interesting! i dont really know what to make of this, but i like it. the first two lines are the best. i dont much like the word "perfect" because, really, what does that mean? but that's just me...
     
    skyfire, Apr 11, 2008
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  5. jim the carpenter

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    i was kind of influensed by that song by the police
    bring on the night from regatta de blanc
     
    jim the carpenter, Apr 12, 2008
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