so... what is it, an attempt at rap? I think the only constructive criticism I can give is that you definitely don't sound 27. then again, I sound like a five year old.
you're slurring the words, be more clear. and no one likes spoken word versions of popular songs, they want them sung to them, basically you are just reading lyrics to us.
"sell able", as in can you make money off of your vocal talents? No, not based off of that recording.