Song I wrote...what do you guys think?

Toast to the Downfall of Modern Idealism

Kids are dying the streets.
Still we play god to another land.

Whatever happend to blood is thicker than water.
How can we let this go on.
Can you tell me why the rich are getting richer,
and the poor just sit and stare?

I promise in the end you will get what is coming.


I've had enough!
Its time to put this to an end.

Do whatever it takes to get our country back.
We will toast our glasses high as the fortress crumbles by our hand!

How did this happen?
How can we let this go on?
I've had enough!
Its time to put this to an end.


(This is intended to be lyrics for a metal song I am working on right now)
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good so far

 

nice, i like it, good start

 

Thanks guys. I am still working out the finishing touches on the guitar and bass riffs. Have yet to even think about drums.

I dont know. I just like to write songs when I am high. Hence the posting in the stoner lounge.

You are a bit of a writer too arent you makesmommycry?