Defeat

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by -Amalie-, Feb 2, 2008.

  1. -Amalie-

    -Amalie- Member

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    Hey everyone! Hope you enjoy reading this. I'm new here so this is my first poem =] any feedback would be great :D



    [font=&quot]Defeat[/font]


    [font=&quot]Used to know how to laugh[/font]
    [font=&quot]Instead I wonder why its so rough[/font]
    [font=&quot]Why everything seems to go wrong[/font]
    [font=&quot]It's been too long[/font]

    [font=&quot]I mind my own business[/font]
    [font=&quot]But yet you find a way[/font]
    [font=&quot]To blame[/font]
    [font=&quot]Me for this mess[/font]

    [font=&quot]Used to smile[/font]
    [font=&quot]Inside and out[/font]
    [font=&quot]Now I just cry[/font]
    [font=&quot]Day in day out![/font]

    [font=&quot]No energy left [/font]
    [font=&quot]Apart from the constant sighs[/font]
    [font=&quot]That I always seem to regret[/font]
    [font=&quot]Now sitting here[/font]
    [font=&quot]Like a broken down shell [/font]
    [font=&quot]Wiping a tear[/font]
    [font=&quot]Wondering how I fell



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  2. blackheartbitch

    blackheartbitch Member

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    quite complex. great imagry in the last stanza.
     
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