The room within Have you ever seen the room within! Amid each and every door Another opening is there, I can feel. Within this very floor Which the ancient lift reaches every now often, There is another floor, there is. Brick within brick, structure within structure. An existence in the cloak of another. Through it passes the sun Shadow, there is none Smoke and smog cannot outline it. Soul in a soul, brick within brick. Crawl, float, swim, walk or aviate This moment I am there, and whoosh- I am not I know, I am this room; amid, within.
Have you ever read the Redwall series? This poem reminds me of the poetic riddles used to often as part of the Redwall quests. Cheers.
This is really well written, I honestly cant really find one bad thing to say about it. I think my favorite part was the Whoosh, you managed to play with that word without it sounding stupid and out of place. Sounds like you either read a lot or youve been writing poetry for a long time.
