Hey can any one please help me correct a text ?

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  1. skalle123

    skalle123 Member

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    Hey can any one please help me correct a text ?

    magical realism:
    The author combines fantastic and (faboulating) elements with the real world and destroy the
    boundarys between the fair and the unfair. The magical and unfair is exposed as real and
    some thing that happens every day.
    The genre is spread in Latinamerica and the most famous authors is Gabriel Garcia
    Marquez, Isabel Allende, but also Laura Esquivel is on the list.
    In Denmark among other things Michael is known to use magical realism.

    El realismo mágico:
    El autor combina fantástico y (faboulating) los elementos
    con el mundo verdadero y destruye las fronteras entre el justo y el injusto.
    El mágico e injusto es expuesto como verdadero y alguna cosa que sucede cada día.
    El género es esparcido en Latinamerica y los autores más famosos es Gabriel Garcia
    Marquez, Isabel Allende, pero también Laura Esquivel está en la lista. En Dinamarca
    entre otras cosas Michael es sabido
    utilizar el realismo mágico.
     
  2. Idunno~do.you?

    Idunno~do.you? Member

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    umm... i'd be happy to help.

    but... i dont speak spanish. hahaha.
    sorry.
     
  3. dirtydog

    dirtydog Banned

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    Line 1: First word should be capitalized.
    Line 2: "Faboulating" -- not a valid word.
    Line 3" "destroy" should be "destroys".
    Line 3: "boundarys" should be "boundaries".
    Lines 3-4: "magical and unfair is exposed". There is a disagreement between subject and verb. Any conjunction (words connected by "and") means the subject is plural. The verb "is" is singular.
    Line 4: "some thing" would usually be written "something". Strictly speaking though, this usage is not an error.
    Line 5: "Latinamerica" should be "Latin America".
    Line 5: "authors is" should be "authors are".
    Line 6: "Marquez, Isabel" should read "Marquez and Isabel".
    Line 7: "Michael" is referred to. Does some part of the next not shown here tell us who Michael is? If not, it should do so, or at least provide his last name. (If in fact "Michael" is a last name in this case, the first name should also be provided.)



    Corrected text might read:
    Magical realism:
    The author combines fantastic elements with the real world and destroys the boundaries between the fair and the unfair. The magical and unfair are exposed as real and something that happens every day. The genre is spread in Latin America and the most famous authors are Gabriel Garcia Marquez and Isabel Allende, but also Laura Esquivel is on the list. In Denmark, among other things, Michael [last name] is known to use magical realism.

     
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