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the space overwhelming,
the place unknown,
in the distant i roam,
the hidden begin to foam,
my life,
one star,
amongst billions, in galaxies,
yet the shine remains as the depths approach,
because in space,
only nomads know

 

i like it:}:}:}
i like this style of writin:}keep on doin it:}
with lots of sunny smiles
Nadia

 

cool!

 

I'm not sure what I think of it. I like it in a way, but it seems rather vague. I can't grasp hold of it properly. The line "the hidden begin to foam" makes no sense to me. I think you might mean "in the distance", but "distant" could have easily been on purpose.

I like the way you start it, in a massive, unknown, empty space.