not sure what to call it.

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by Freakymetalchik, Nov 4, 2007.

  1. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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    not really sure of a title, suggestions welcome, comments welcome.


    its just another day of reality
    i close my eyes to escape it
    the bright lights flash
    a million tiny colors
    push my fingers into my eyes
    it doesn't help now
    not anymore

    it seems the more i try to fix things
    they only get worse
    a million pins and needles
    stuck into my face
    i really dont mind
    just let the blood run down
    like tears, only sweeter

    fix me
    solve my problems
    heal my pain
    words ive heard a million times
    promised, but never done
    why do i keep expecting more
    but why do they keep asking me
    maybe im done
    maybe all of this
    was all i had to give?
     
  2. heywood floyd

    heywood floyd Banned

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    I think you should call it 'don't fuck with me or I'll kill myself'.
     
  3. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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    ok. i have no intention of killing my self, by the way...
     
  4. groovecookie

    groovecookie Member

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    That hit a nerve. definately felt that one.
     
  5. blackheartbitch

    blackheartbitch Member

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    i like the title..."forget being fixed" lol but thats my suggestion.
    i really like this poem...you know it hit a soft spot with me. im guessing you broke the writers block?

    oh and heywood...dont be so quick to judge people...just because they write something like this doesnt mean they want to kill themselves.
     
  6. poopzilla33

    poopzilla33 Member

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    ^ some people on here are just mean for the sake of being mean, best to just not listen to 'em
     
  7. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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    thanks guys
    glad you liked it.
    :)
     
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