A little drunk, but still writing

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by logwarrior, Sep 8, 2007.

  1. logwarrior

    logwarrior Member

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    First work posted here. Wrote it when I was pretty drunk. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated.

    We were walking down the street.
    Soberly I knew we'd meet.
    Calf high water everywhere
    Barfoot was what we dared.

    The radio show was hit too.
    On and off and something new
    On was news and a tune or few
    Off it was just me and you

    The Fishtank was where we met
    To Chris and Jeff I owe this debt.
    At beer pong was where first met eyes,
    So beer pong was how I finished the night.

    My hate for rain died that night.
    My feelings I won't even fight.
    Another place and another time
    And you would not even be mine.
     
  2. blackheartbitch

    blackheartbitch Member

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    i like it...it reminded me of something long forgotten to me...sweet
     
  3. 19FlowerGirl87

    19FlowerGirl87 Member

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    Nice. Hey...

    What have you been drinking, and do you have anymore to share? lol.
     
  4. logwarrior

    logwarrior Member

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    beer and KD...all day every day
     
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  6. Malapascua

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    I really like it, but I can't get this line to make sense to me???
     
  7. logwarrior

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    see title "a little drunk..." thanks for pointing that out...corrected
     
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