Messege To A Dying Friend (first poem on here!)

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by TheKeg, Aug 12, 2007.

  1. TheKeg

    TheKeg Recovered Flower

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    Obviously the title kinda suggests what this is about, but I really want to know what this poem means to each and everyone of you personally, the feelings that it draws out of you. What image springs to mind? People have told me that this is the most emotional poem I have ever written, and I intended it that way. I basically tried to spill my heart at that current moment on to the paper...Thanks...

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    Wiggle your finger
    That was all I needed.

    Look beyond those white fabric clouds
    And lock eyes with me
    That's all I ever need.

    I can rip out those tubes
    All these needles will disappear.
    I can get you out of this coma.
    But I need some angel wings first,
    Can I borrow yours?

    Pale lucid hands clutch my pinkie
    You're alive again.
    What once is dead is blooming
    But I never let you go...
     
  2. Malapascua

    Malapascua Member

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    Is good,
    It's emotional.

    But maybe the third word in this line

    Should be "was", instead of "is".
     
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