tell me what you think

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by blackheartbitch, Aug 7, 2007.

  1. blackheartbitch

    blackheartbitch Member

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    We are nothing but two hopeless, loveless souls merging
    in the search for love and affection that never allowed us
    to overcome the emptiness we hold deep inside.

    Holding onto hope that one day find the love
    we are starving for but for now
    our hunger goes on in this empty life.

    Our journey for satisfaction goes on
    in seperate directions we leave behind
    the time we once had together.

    All comments/critiques are welcomed.
     
  2. shobs

    shobs Member

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    it feels like prose, too much of a story line

    good start though!
     
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