I Am Your Poem

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by myself, Jun 25, 2007.

  1. myself

    myself just me

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    I am to you just a voice, or even less, just a bunch of words appearing to you in silence. How can I call you, with my silent, voiceless, merely written words? Letters you can just ignore and never read... I am the poem you never heard in your inner thoughts, and thus never could write... So I wrote myself for you. Will you ever notice me, will you ever read me?

    You seem busy writing and reading other poems, leaving the poem that is ceaselessly writing herself for you aside...
     
  2. White Scorpion

    White Scorpion 4umotographer

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    I am the eye that reads your poem, the ear that hears your voice. The silence that greets your silence. Your words are drawing me closer to you, beyond the hate and jealousy of the one-thought brigade. Hit them with your fish tail, mermaid. You have nothing to lose.
     
  3. blackheartbitch

    blackheartbitch Member

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    i am the hand that scribbles the elocant words you wish to write but decidedly hold inside your blackened soul. the mermaids sweetly forget you as you become the outcast they mock and jeer at for the words i write so you decidedly keep me a secret.
     
  4. Freakymetalchik

    Freakymetalchik BITCH.

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    i am the freak who likes your poem. lol. its really good
     
  5. Malapascua

    Malapascua Member

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    I am the audience that sits and watches these poems perform before me, and I wiat in anticipation for more.

    You should all be proud of your works of art here.
     
  6. jim kirby

    jim kirby Member

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    i am the one who thinks you're fun
    i am the man who knows you can
    luv ya!
     
  7. Musikero

    Musikero Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    Sorry, didn't really work for me. I like the idea behind it, but the way it was written down, it sounded (in my head, anyway) more like prose than poetry, albeit rather poetic prose. I hope this doesn't discourage you from writing more poems, though. After all, you don't have to follow MY idea of poetry.:)

    Peace.
     
  8. Musikero

    Musikero Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    PS
    I DO like the last line though.
     
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