First poem posted, I'd love some feedback please.

Just something I wrote a while back, I always write stuff like this, but, never showed it to anyone, is it any good? I don't know when I read back over my own stuff, need others opinions!

I called it "Conception Acception" for some reason when I wrote it.

Acceptance of the self, is a crucial role in life
Learn to love the things you hate,
And discount the negativity of others.
When it comes down to it, all that matters is love.
The power to be a positive person.
Bring happiness into the lives of others,
As calmness is a much sought after quality.
Whats the point in fighting-
When theres nothing to row about.
Love the life you have,
And the good/bad people you meet.
Life only comes Once and Once can be enough.
When you decide to pour it all out-
While keeping it steady inside.

Thanks for taking the time to read this!

 

It's really good, I like this line: "what's the point in fighting -when there's nothing to row about". Nice point.

 

Thank you Freakymetalchick! It means alot to me any comments I get. Happy you liked it!

 

"the power to be a positive person" ... nice line .. work on it cos it needs a few commas etc ... jeez who am i to complain? i don't even use caps ... luv ya!

 

I myself loved this line. After all when you take a look at the things you hate or dislike, it can be just a mirror of oneself and what you yourself don't like. And about your grammar, don't worry about what other's say, sometimes others have a hard time taking themselves outside of their own shoes. Other's grammar is just how they would do it themselves. How you wrote it is perfectly fine.

 

wonderful poem; good flow with how you make your points.

 

I liked it...alot...it was really really good.

 

Thanks so much everyone, I'm overwhelmed by the responses I got! I just write random things like this in my journals sometimes and they flow out of me in the matter of a minute. I'm really happy to see that other people found something in them that they could connect with.
In answer to the grammer, thanks for letting me know your feelings jim kirby. I just kinda stuck them in as I was typing it off the piece of paper, so not that much thought was put into them.
Thanks anyway for taking the time to comment back everyone, you've made my day to see what other people think!
Peace, Love and Happiness to all

 

was their anything wrong with what I said here for someone to pm me and tell me to go fuck myself? I find it unappropriate, it's just my opinion.

 

oh, that's so true, i had to come on a journey to get to self acceptance, and this poem really illustrates that!

 

Thank you nynysuts. Yes it is really important I feel too, you have to love yourself.

 

I especially like these lines. Keep pouring. Keep writing.

Peace,
Aidan.

 

pretty cool

 

Thanks Redyelyuc and Jack. I'm happy that you liked those lines red, thats what it is all about for me anyway, being creative and finding what brings joy to yourself while living a good harmonious life. Its cool that the feedback has been positive, this is the first thing I ever wrote here or showed to anyone in terms of my rambling poetic thoughts!

 

Just wanted to bring this poem back up to see if anyone else had anyone else gets anything from it?